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Spirit prologue (update with description below)
Well, I pushed myself on this little Prologue, And it's the first time I do a comic with panels of this type, it was a bit difficult but I did it.

Anyways, This is the first page of a small adventure am making about two dragonicans in the lake, both want to watch the moonlights effects that cause the three moons on the water, but wake falls asleep due rowing so much, so after a little while Kasai starts having visions about her mother.  
This is supposed to be sad xD and i hope it works. 

1° Protagonist: :icondragons-of-dragonica:Kasai
2° Protagonist: :iconsixpathsoffriendship:Wake

P.S. the moonlights didn't affect her so they dont have nothing to do here, because she usually has visions frequently about her mom sometimes

Well folks! i will do the next page when i can :D if you like this page i will maybe do the next one!

and these are some pics of them  Carrying you   
                                                   Spear Dancer
                                                   Dragonican Wake

To recognize them a little in this comic

UPDATE DESCRPTION:
Guys I know you liked this first page but I'm not having inspiration to keep doing this comic, I don't have the ''Motivation'' that i had few months ago and I KNOW you guys are asking me from time in time the next page... i know that!, but we'll see if i can do this when i feel better or any further.

Anyways, i made this with heart for a person.

Worthy or not, hope you guys like it.



Art © sixpathoffriendship
Characters Wake and Kasai  
© Me and Dragons of Dragonica


Devious Comments

:iconargos90:
Argos90 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2017  Student Digital Artist
Pinta muy lindo bro! habra una pagina 2? :D :D :D
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:iconsixpathsoffriendship:
sixpathsoffriendship Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
sip :3
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:iconargos90:
Argos90 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2017  Student Digital Artist
jejeje perfectirijillo XD
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:iconsixpathsoffriendship:
sixpathsoffriendship Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
x3 ejejeje
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:iconwillbreaker98:
willbreaker98 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2017
hmm interesting
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:iconjakc1423:
jakc1423 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017
The dialog is  stiff in some places of the first text like it doesn't sound like something a real person would say. Examples: "I an like a monster" could be "I look like a monster", and "the visual effects of the water and the moonlights" could be "how beautiful the water looks in the moonlight" one more thing. Show don't tell, she didn't have to mention how many moons were in the sky.


I hope I don't sound too harsh with my criticism this looks good and I'm curious to see where it goes.

PS I bet you all my zero deviant points that, that ghost is not her mother. Whole thing just seems suspicious to me.
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:iconneronantenor:
NeronAntenor Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
You did a Comic? That is absolutely awesome  Heart Heart Heart 

I must read it and give it my like and opinion La la la la La la la la La la la la 

I am sure it will be wonderful :happybounce: :happybounce: :happybounce: 
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:icondablueguy:
dablueguy Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
good lay out.
the text can be more center aligned int he first one, the bottom gutter is a bit too big.
also in terms of speech balloons try something else, just the squares looks a bit off.
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:iconsixpathsoffriendship:
sixpathsoffriendship Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yeaah its my very first try (: so i regonize my mistakes here, next time hope to do it better

Thanks for you opinion!
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:icondablueguy:
dablueguy Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
Hey, you got this!
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:iconw1shmaker:
W1shmaker Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017
ooo nice job
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:iconsixpathsoffriendship:
sixpathsoffriendship Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks mate ;3;
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:iconw1shmaker:
W1shmaker Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017
anytime pal
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:iconninjahamster5:
Ninjahamster5 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
You have officially piqued my interest.
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:iconsixpathsoffriendship:
sixpathsoffriendship Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yay ;v;
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:iconninjahamster5:
Ninjahamster5 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
No need to be sad :3
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